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The grass is always greener
On the other side of the field
Out of reach, out of your league…

Are forbidden fruits as sweet as they say?

In a field full of poisonous ideals
The grass will never be as sweet,
Or soft…only new.

Was it worth it?

And your heart grows ill
With the unfamiliar and the guilt
Taking its toll, this is what you signed on for…

Is it everything you’d hoped for?

In a field full of pesticides
Your soul is left there to die
Along with your heart…

Will you miss them?

The grass seemed so much greener
On the other side of the field
Shiny, new…and tainted.

I hope it was worth it.
©2007-2009 ~superstitious13
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Author's Comments

this is a bit random and bitter i guess.

thoughts and feelings greatly appreciated.

<3

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:iconiamnotepad:
Amazing doll, as always. I always get something out of everything you write.
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:iconbaddog70:
Sounds like a coming of age love affair with someone much older than she....and it didn't pay off in the end...to much regret. Another broken heart, touched with acid rain.

Well done. :-)

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---Live and love today like there was no tomorrow...
:iconshutterbug13:
so glad that you posted something baby!

it's striking in a subtle way.
wonderful to read your writings again,

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Meghan
I have found freedom
...losing all hope is freedom
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lovesloves.
2.5hrs til' seattle.

p.s. bitter is the way you should roll.

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k-rista
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:iconperi-dots:
niiiiiiiiiiiiiice. its cool, I don't know how to say what I want to sayt so I'll just say this-good job.

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If there is a quote out there that can reflect the fact that my mood is always changing, I'd put it here. But there isn't, so I won't

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Is this thing on?
:iconelegantletdowns:
I definitely relate to this - I like it a lot.

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Drown the frown into a smile.
:icontachyondecay:
This reminds me of Over the Hedge. All of the animals thought the backyard and kitchen were the Promised Land on the other side of the hedge. Turns out it was actually a cunningly disguised death trap and blockbuster movie....

But I digress. I'm not going to offer any real critique on this, because I think it works well as it is. I love the contrasting imagery. And the last lines is quite ... hmm ... is the opposite of a non sequitur a "sequitur"? Because that's what the last line is. It follows from the rest of the poem in a wonderfully lateral way.

That is all.

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If you wish to make an apple pie from scratch, you must first create the universe. -- Carl Sagan

~superstitious13 and =shutterbug13 lured me here.
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