you've got Undeniable charm, and you don't suck, i like hun i do very soft but strong kinda like a kiss *mhmm* i dunno your the poet i feel silly commenting

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Meghan
I have found freedom
...losing all hope is freedom

oh..my...god....Cortney..I wanted to call you tonight to tell you something..and this poem like..totally reflects it..perfect timing...great description..you captured the feeling of being in stupid love perfectly...this made me smile, that you...

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xoxoxo Melanie

I'd have to agree with Meghan and Melanie on the points that:
a) You don't suck (a malfunctioning vacuum cleaner sucks more than you do).
b) Total reflection and perfect timing
c) Pie.

For the sake of comment, we'll start with point B. I've been feeling really down today. It happens, mostly because hormones are fickle things, but also due to the things that happen in my life and how I react. So sometimes I feel really happy and upbeat, other times I feel down and out and like everything is standing still.

Today was one of those days, and your poem captured how I felt. Let down. Like very few people truly cared about my wellbeing, and those who do care were still . . . distant . . . like there's a glass wall that separates me from them.

This is a great poem. In fact, it's very close to "My Eden" in calibre. "My second-hand heart" is awesome, astounding imagery. This is the sort of stuff that doesn't win awards. This is the sort of stuff that gets awards named after it (or the author)!

The only thing I'd watch is your use of the word "and" at the beginning of lines. Sometimes it seems a bit redundant. The poem doesn't lose much from its addition, but I don't know if it would be very different without it. Particularly stanza four, "Exposed / And unprotected" could very easily become "Exposed / Unprotected" to put more emphasis on "unprotected". Just a thought.

Okay, A. You don't suck. I know that self-deprecation is a great thing, because I do it all the time, it is my Way of Life. The Tao of Ben. But the best thing about self-deprecation (other than the fact that I promised I would never sue myself!) is that you have great friends who will immediately leap to your defense and say, "Hey, wait a minute . . . you don't suck!"

So here's for the leaping.

(And as for C . . . well . . . pie is good. It's like a universal truth. I mean, you may not like all types of pie--heck, you may not have found a pie you liked yet. But there is a Perfect Pie out there for everyone.)

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If you wish to make an apple pie from scratch, you must first create the universe. -- Carl Sagan

~superstitious13 and =shutterbug13 lured me here.
Maybe Dats Your Pwoblem Too

Oh hon, this is so lovely. I love the line 'second-hand heart'e
This is such a cute poem. It brings up lovely imagry.

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^{Remember that at any given moment
there are a thousand things
you can love.}

Oh thats gorgeous The whole thing builds up and then the last line nicely caps it all off

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Neutral nothings notice nonchalance, nodding nominally.
Or others opting out of opinionated oracles orchestrating our opus.

great job doll

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"I have found freedom.
....Losing all hope is freedom."

Never feel silly commenting. Loves you!

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i Love You<3. Period.
-The China Doll

*~ChinaDolls13=Mine and =shutterbug13's joint photography account*

Thanks. Glad you liked it, and there's cabaret tonight so I won't be home 'til late so I won't see you 'til friday unless you come tonight(thursday)and then you can tell me. or just...email me...i dont know. Loves!

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i Love You<3. Period.
-The China Doll

*~ChinaDolls13=Mine and =shutterbug13's joint photography account*

Okay, first off, thanks SO much for the favourite Ben, means bunches. I hate to hear that you're not feeling too hot today, but thanks for taking the time out to read and comment on my work, and I'm happy it could make you feel a bit better, and if not better, more easily related to.

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i Love You<3. Period.
-The China Doll

*~ChinaDolls13=Mine and =shutterbug13's joint photography account*